Title: Hairspray Surprise
The weekend
is finally here
Seat C13
in a packed house
Chest tightens
as lights go to black
Can he dance?
Stomach churns
as he takes the stage
Can he sing?
Roll call
And “I’m Link”
He remembered
his lines
He CAN dance
Pressure builds
to his first solo
“Link will sing a song
to Tracy”
I grip the
seat handles
A little sweat
forms on my neck
“They say it’s a man’s world”
He CAN sing
Chest loosens
Sweat disappears
Relief, excitement
Each song
Each line
Each dance move
looks effortless
Curtain call
Takes his final bow
He CAN act
Feeling PROUD
For the last four months, my eighth grade son, has been preparing for his middle school musical. The musical was Hairspray, and his part was Link, a lead character. He practiced his lines, but I never saw him practice his moves or hear him sing seriously. He had good rehearsals and bad rehearsals, but the premiere of the show finally arrived on Friday. He seemed nervous, but I felt extremely nervous. I just wanted him to feel happy about how he performed.
He was awesome! He strutted and danced across the stage. He belted out his lines and songs. And most importantly, he had a blast. Since he was born, he has loved nothing but sports (his first word was “ball”), so I was surprised when he found his way to the stage (I actually questioned his older sister, “Did he really sign up for the musical?). Well, this weekend, he proved that he could play in another venue, the theater stage. I am feeling very proud on this Sunday morning.
Fun title! Yet what really comes through in this slice is the arc from understandable doubt to palpable pride. Congratulations to your son and you on the successful debut.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You poem is really efffective. Your very short lines evoke your anxiety, and also your physical details (sweat, grip…). You put your son’s lines in quotation marks, which brings him on to the stage for us. Great piece- its hard to be a parent, isn’t it?!
LikeLiked by 1 person
You may have figured out that I was a welcome wagon commenter for you! I really enjoyed reading you this month. I love your YA writing and really encourage you to work to publish!
LikeLiked by 1 person
THANK YOU SO MUCH! You made this experience unforgettable. I will be back next March.:) I have another middle grade manuscript that my daughter is encouraging me to try to get it published. As you know (you’ve been following), I am extremely busy, but I am going to carve out time to send it in. THANK YOU for a wonderful month of writing!!!!!!!
LikeLike
This was such a fun poem to read. I loved the repetition and how you built this suspense! Congratulations to your son! What a great experience for all.
I agree with Fran – I loved reading your work as well this month! I, too, encourage you to get out there and get published (I know, easier said then done!!)… And bravo to you for being a 6th grade teacher who also writes – that is rare!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Trina, for the constant feedback! It is so greatly appreciated. Like I wrote above, I will be back next March. I have a deal with my daughter, who also writes, that if I send in my manuscript, she will continue to write and get some of it out for publication (school magazine).:) Thank you again!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks for sharing your proud moments!
LikeLike
Way to go for your son! I liked how you mixed up the format in your post to build emotion and reflection. I can definitely relate to those anxious moments witnessing your son perform.
LikeLiked by 1 person